the internet has as many disadvantages as it does advantages

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The Internet has as many disadvantages as it does advantages. To what extent bởi you agree with this agreement.

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We live in an age when Internet is one ofthe most popular tools that people use everyday. It helps our lives become moreand more convenient. However, it can’t (Do not use contractions in formal writing.) be denied that Internet has bothpositive aspects and negative aspects.

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To begin with, the Internet gives us instantaccess to tát information due to tát technological advances (That does not make sense. ) and the presence of theInternet in every corner of the world. (Repetitious) As a result, people can find out thelastest trends and news in real time. For example, before the Internet become (wrong verb form) common, it is impossible for us to tát know what was happening in the world. Now,we just take a few minutes to tát update (wrong word) information. Secondly, in the Internetage, the gap between people around the earth has been shortened. Thanks toInternet, (That is not good English.) we can interact with others through chatting, forums and socialnetworking. It is true to tát say that distance is no longer a big problem in thedeveloping countries. technology world.

On the other hand, Internet can also havedisadvantages. Firstly, First, there are many websites which contain violent or sexualimages. If youngster children watch them by chance, their hearts and minds will bepoisoned seriously. In addition, it is sánh easy for them human – beings to tát beaddicted. Many people are now addicted to tát the Internet and wasting their timeto living in a virtual life other than the not their real life. This problem affect to theircareer and relationships.

In conclusion, every coin has 2 face (wrong expression) and the Internet is the same, but it will become a perfect tool if we know how to tát useit correctly.